#1
Each small ice cream truck
ran over every little boy, what luck
that they became flat.
"One was a doctor, two was a cat,
three was a schizoid, and four was a twat."
Each tall apple tree climbed
every "I don't believe the singer's died,
I just found his pickled heart buried deep in his lover's chest."
while the little refugees crowded 'round
and sang, enunciating every "i",
"I was a Joker, I strangled every cat,
I move mountains,
and shit on every valley."

He motioned me
"each towering statue of past dictators
fell on a very little playground,
and the children, needing to sew
the metal took up welding instead."
to a place, celebration.
"I'm not lonely," it's there.
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On second thought, **** tuning forks. You best be carrying around a grand piano that was tuned by an Italian
#3
Yeah, this is great. Especially the title and the first 3 lines.

There's this 13 year old kid who goes to the same guitar teacher that I do. I've been leaning Beethoven's "Moonlight Sonata" for like 2 months now...and this little bastard caught up to me in two weeks. Plays it better too. Maybe I should buy him some ice-cream.

Anyway, very last line seemed a bit off to me. It doesn't really make sense. Plus, what's the deal with the ""? Is somebody talking? Who is talking? Is it the same person talking every time?

Other than that, I see nothing that needs to be changed. Fun read, I dig it!

(c4c, The Snooze button if you get the chance, por favor)
#4
"every "I don't believe the singer's died,
I just found his pickled heart buried deep in his lover's chest.""
This sounded kind of out of place to me.

I really liked this song. The meaning is kind of weird but its good.
Its kind of one big story about a bunch of little stories which was cool.
It was funny and I'm definitely glad I took the time to read it.
Good job.