#1
Aite so I wrote this as a poem (Thats my main thing, its what I'm good at) and my friend told me to make it a song. Tell me what you think.

(Verse one)
Roses on a windowsill
My heart will wilt before they do
You’ve left it broken and unused

(Chorus)
I’m gonna’ move on,
To someone with a heart
Gonna’ move on,
To someone I can trust

(Verse two)
And when you said I love you
It was just empty words
They made me believe in a lie

(Chorus two)
I’m gonna’ move on,
To someone with a heart
Gonna’ move on,
To someone I can trust

I’m gonna’ move on,
To someone with a heart
Gonna’ move on,
To someone I can trust

(Bridge)
I spent my time
I wasted my money
I gave you my heart
Now you’re a memory
Like a feather on the wind
A grain, in the sands of time

(Chorus three)
I’m gonna’ move on,
To someone with a heart
Gonna’ move on,
To someone I can trust

(Last Verse)
Even in the rain
Someone who can smile
Even though she’s sad
Who knows what really matters
Even in the worst of times
Someone unlike you


I am a bit new to writing songs but I also wrote guitar tabs for this song. Once I convert it to an electronic file I'll post the tabs. Critique please and thank you.
"If you're afraid to fly, I guess you never will" ~ 3 Doors Down Its the only one you've got

#4
Aite, thanks. About what I expected.
"If you're afraid to fly, I guess you never will" ~ 3 Doors Down Its the only one you've got