#1
I haven't written song parodies in years, but I came up with this idea while I was at work and figured it was worth a shot. Yes, this is pretty stupid, its meant to be. If I get good feedback on this then I might do some more parodies. And I'm a huge Hawthonre Heights fan so this wasn't anything personal, just having some fun.

I breath
In and out it’s just no help
Ouchie
These kidney stones they hurt like hell
In the past I have spent days in here
I’ve got blisters my rear
I’ve tried to use bandages
They don’t help in any way

I’m constipated
Boy, do I really hate it
My colon’s like a balloon
That’s been all deflated

It seems like everyday
I sit and wait but it’s just no use
God, can’t you hear my pain?
All I want to do is poop
Even though I just went
5 minutes later I’m back again
I don’t want the worst case scenario
Where I’d drop my lungs below

I’m constipated
Boy, do I really hate it
My colon’s like a balloon
That’s been all deflated

I’m constipated
And help I’ve debated
But enemas and laxatives
Are all overrated

But that’s not the only
Problem I’ve got
As I sit here with my legs crossed
Trying not to think about water

Cause I gotta pee
Can I use your restroom please?
I can’t hold it in
My back teeth are floating

I had to pee
But I couldn’t find relief
Now I’ve wet my pants
And everyone's laughing at me
#2
lmfao. I love it, the only thing that's sorta awkward is the "constipated" chorus because I can't figure out how you would say "I'm constipated" the same as "rescue me" :P

but good parody, keep it up.
How can i forget the way you led me through the path into heaven to leave me behind?
#3
yeah i hear ya but it works with just a tad bit of tweaking, thanks for the kind words
#4
Nice. It's pretty funny, but did you include part of Overrated by Less Than Jake in there? By the way, I know I didn't help anything, but if you'll do crit4crit, it's in my sig.
#5
no the constipated part is the chorus, it's hard to tell on paper, i'm trying to record it, it actually doesn't sound that bad it just looks really awkward
#6
I mean right here sounds like the chorus of Overrated:

I’m constipated
And help I’ve debated
But enemas and laxatives
Are all overrated

But that’s not the only
Problem I’ve got
As I sit here with my legs crossed
Trying not to think about water


Must just be coincidence.