#1
I wrote this when I was feeling pretty down, and some people at school were picking on me again. I had a kinda Linkin Park style of music in mind for this, by the way.

Italics: Softly
Bold: Screamed
(Brackets): Spoken in background

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How can I feel secure
When those around me
Take everything away

How can I be assured
That those beside me

Will stay until tomorrow

It's like nothing can take the pain from me
I can't apologise for things I've never said or done
And I've noticed you walk away from me
As if you're paranoid about what I have become

(Don't let me fade away)
Pushing me aside
(Don't let me fade away)
And my life
Sometimes I ask myself
"How can this be real?"
(Don't let me fade away)
When I've nothing left to feel

I can't hope to be myself
When day by day I'm
Slowly breaking down

And I can trust no-one else
When face to face my

Emotions turn to hatred

And they bring out the worst inside of me
Forcing the agony from deep inside the darkest place
And I noticed you running away from me
Under pressure when you've got nothing left to say

(Don't let me fade away)
Pushing me aside
(Don't let me fade away)
And my life
Sometimes I ask myself
"How can this be real?"
(Don't let me fade away)
When I've nothing left to feel

*Guitar Solo*

NO!
(All the pain and emptiness pulling me)
DOWN!
(Only words and memories left taking me)
THROUGH!
(The loneliness, I can't find my way)
OUT!
(And so I can't escape the fact that they)
KNOW!
(All the pain and emptiness pulling me)
DOWN!
(Only words and memories left taking me)
THROUGH!
(The loneliness, I can't find my way)
OUT!
(And so I can't escape the fact that they)
KNOW!

(Don't let me fade away)
Pushing me aside
(Don't let me fade away)
And my life
Sometimes I ask myself
"How can this be real?"
(Don't let me fade away)
When I've nothing left to feel

(Don't let me fade away)
When I'm pushing it aside
(Don't let me fade away)
Of my life
Sometimes I wonder why
This is how I feel
(Don't let me fade away)
When nothing else is real
#2
It's good. Reminds me of Don't Stay, but I'm not really sure why. I don't think the last line should be screamed, but instead have it kind of fade out. Anyways, if you'll do crit4crit, pick one from my sig; I think you'll like Circuit more, but it's your choice.
#3
yah, i thought of 'dont stay' as well. but also kinda 'pushing me away' and 'lying from you'
either way, great job. a great insight to anger.
i commend u, sah.
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#4
Deep, I can see where its coming from.
It sort of reminds me of Tokio Hotel's 'Scream, probably because of the part:
"NO!
(All the pain and emptiness pulling me)
DOWN!
(Only words and memories left taking me)
THROUGH!
(The loneliness, I can't find my way)
OUT!
(And so I can't escape the fact that they)
KNOW!
(All the pain and emptiness pulling me)
DOWN!
(Only words and memories left taking me)
THROUGH!
(The loneliness, I can't find my way)
OUT!
(And so I can't escape the fact that they)
KNOW!"

But very nice job.
-claps for you-