#1
OTS. c4c.

"Save the Cheerleader, Save the World"

She scribbles another sonnet for the sandman.
Eyes fixed on the only comet in her atmosphere.
She wishes for sea storms born from the angst
Within her plastic heart. Words turned to static art.
"I don't quite know where I'm going yet.
But I think I'll like it there."
She whispers softly as she exhales her
Cold, caustic breath onto her favorite
Teddy bear's chest. Forced a weak smile.
"I've missed you, my white knight."
#2
i liked it
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

#3
Quote by NGD1313
OTS. c4c.

"Save the Cheerleader, Save the World"

She scribbles another sonnet for the sandman.
Eyes fixed on the only comet in her atmosphere. I love the interal rhyming of sonnet/comet here. Very clever and works well with the flow
She wishes for sea storms born from the angst
Within her plastic heart. Words turned to static art.These two sentences are the best in the piece without a doubt. I especially loved "Words turned to static art"
"I don't quite know where I'm going yet.
But I think I'll like it there."
She whispers softly as she exhales her
Cold, caustic breath onto her favorite
Teddy bear's chest. The flow and rhyming here is magicForced a weak smile.
"I've missed you, my white knight."


A beautiful piece, really nice to read. Just a really nice piece of poetry. I really enjoyed it. Can't find much to pick out thats wrong with it. Well done!
#4
The full stops (most of them) are annoying, they cut the flow far too much.

I usually dislike the capitals at the start of every line, but it half-works here. Only half though, eh.

I'll be backs.
There's only one thing we can do to thwart the plot of these albino shape-shifting lizard BITCHES!