#1
Ive been working on a solo for a song I'm writing and want to know what you all think about it. It's not done, I kind of want to see where others think I should take it. Feel free to criticize, I'm a newbie in writing songs.
tr - trill
the bend from 19 to 20 is not needed but I like to include it the way I play it. It's just a quick slide down the 3rd string.

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---------7-7-8-7--7-7-8-7---19b20\1------------------
-7tr8--7-7-8-7--7-7-8-7----------------------------------
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0-2-3--2-3-5--3-5-6--5-6-8--6-8-9--8-9-11--9-11-12--11-12-14--13tr14-----
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#2
make that bottom bar a chain of hammer ons... like

0h2h3--2h3h5--3h5h6--5h6h8--6h8h9--8h9h11--9h11h12--11h12h14--13tr14
#3
It's cool. i have a comment though: its a bit repetitive. otherwise, pretty cool. I was a n00b once too lol
#5
i'd prolly switch strings instead of going up that one string, but that's just me
#6
that ascension part at the end is cool
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#7
I tried hammerons and it doesnt get the thickness I wanted in the sound, but it does make it sound cooler going faster up. Thanks for your opinions. I really like the sounds on that string all of the others dont seem to fit into my song right.

And instead of hammerons, in a group of three it would hammeron then slide, for example:

0h2/3 2h3/5

it sounds AWESOME. I'm using that instead of my idea! Thanks!
#8
Oh, and would should go next? I dont want to repeat that same part, and I want the solo longer. Should I descend now?

And if your playing this solo to hear it, put the echo up really high, it sounds cool, especially the 3rd string slide from 19 down.