#1
This is a song I started working on yesterday and finished today, it's comprised of a few different riffs but its at a very very rough stage right now. Perhaps you all could help me out,

The file will be attached below here is what I am having trouble with,
1. A better bass part, it seems kinda... floppy..
2. A better drum part, the drums right now are straight out of Smoke on The Water, which fit, but I am looking for something more original.
3. A better bridge/chorus, it just sounds off to me and I think it could be much better
4. Lyrics, I haven't decided what the song is going to be about, but if any of you have a topic that you think will fit well with the instruments please do tell.

So, comment, critique and help out if you can, and as always, you comment, I'll comment.
Attachments:
Random Song.zip