#1
*UNFINISHED*


Take a moment to listen to
the voices of the dead that will soon be you
nothings right and nothings fair
your not going to escape so stay right there

"Love and hate fades away
people are always there
but never stay"
so the voices of the grave will say
When The Power of Love overcomes the Love of Power, that is when the world will be at peace --Jimi Hendrix

The roads of hell are paved with good intentions
#2
It could be improved by polishing up the syllable countm changing the word 'fades' to 'fade', getting rid of 'will' in the second line, and changing the 'will' in the last line to 'do'.

I love the lyrics, though.
Slipknot Fan.

Thanks, but I'm not God. If I were God, 3/4 of you would be girls, and the rest would be pizza and beer. –Axl Rose
#3
yeah ill def keep that in mind, i just had these thoughts in the middle of college and threw them down on paper so i definately need to do some editing
When The Power of Love overcomes the Love of Power, that is when the world will be at peace --Jimi Hendrix

The roads of hell are paved with good intentions