#1
A Bullet Sounds The Same In Every Language

(Light guitar intro, getting progresivly heavier)

When i saw you walking down the road
My herat skipped a beat
And i was told
That we could never last anymore

I put a gun to my head
And wished i was dead
But some things cant be undone
Somethings cant be rerun

Chorus
Ly life is flashing before my eyes
My memories quickly passing by
I wish it didnt have to end this way
Im not going to live another day

All we did was scream and shout
But we loved eachother down inside
Until you took my heart and spat it out
And then i realized

Chorus
Ly life is flashing before my eyes
My memories quickly passing by
I wish it didnt have to end this way
Im not going to live another day

(Solo)

My life is crumbling away...

It will never be the same...

I'll always keep your memory vague...

A bullet sounds the same in every language...

And there nothign you can say to stop me...


there are hold in there but i didnt add them


Any thoughts? good or bad feedback ill take it all


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Last edited by Snuffles at Oct 17, 2008,
#3
I agree. nothing new, nothing interesting and the rhyming is forced cliched and boring. Also, read the rules on posting. I won't report you, cause I'm not mean, but I'm just warning you before someone else reports you
#4
First off, I really like the title.

Is the first line of the chorus supposed to be: "Ly life is flashing before my eyes" or "My life is flashing before my eyes"? It says Ly both times but that leaves me completely confused.

The song has a really generic feel to it and just sounds like any other "suicide" song.

I think I would use the title and rewrite the piece.
#5
I think that the others are right. It does sound like a lot of other broken-hearted suicide songs. Having said that, I really did enjoy the piece. I thought it was pretty catchy and I would love to hear it with the music. So keep up the work and try to make things a little more fresh and creative in the future.