#1
Hi guys, I wanted to get an opinion on this song. I didnt write this, my friend dan wrote most of it, I just did bass and keys. He thinks this song is complete garbage and that no one would ever want to listen to what he writes, so I wanted your guys opinions cuz I think hes a decent enough songwriter. Its track 1 in my profile.
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#2
Its ok....it would be great if the guitar didn't sound SO thin.......I couldn't stand listening to all of it due to the tone of the guitar....... but redo it with a thicker tone and it will be ALOT better.
#3
I liked it. There were enough changes to keep it interesting and the melody was nice. Just have to fix up the guitar tone a bit (mainly the lead). The rhythm tone was ok. What was used for the drums?

All in all, not a bad tune. Your friend is just being a little too hard on himself.


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#4
The timing was off in some parts, but the phrasing was quite neat. However, for an instrumental there were just to many repeats and the guitars tone became boring. Unless your planning to add lyrics, less repeating measures.
Also did you record the drums or program them, the sound was quite good if you programed them.
#5
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The timing was off in some parts, but the phrasing was quite neat. However, for an instrumental there were just to many repeats and the guitars tone became boring. Unless your planning to add lyrics, less repeating measures.
Also did you record the drums or program them, the sound was quite good if you programed them.

Theres gonna be lyrics, but we dont have a singer yet. Drums were just loops that he made with whatever software. And I know his tone could use some improvement, but I feel like a dick telling him that because Ive already gotten him to improve it so much from what it use to be. It use to be this slipknot-esque distortion with so much fuzz that you couldnt pick the notes apart.
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