#1
Hi there, here the other day, I was scribling my thought on to a piece of paper, wich I dont do often enough, sadly. Well anyway, I started thinking about my father, and somewhat of a rolemodel he is, and I scrambled together a text. I feel pretty good about posting it on this forum since I'm somewhat anonymous and nobody knows me here. Please just read it and reply with your thougts about it
PS: sorry for my bad english.

Alcohol, the thing you love to hate

Killing himself slowly,
the alcohol's dragging him down.
He sucks all the life and energy,
instantly when he walks in the room.
Everyone can see it, he's drunk yet again.

My friends laugh at his bad jokes,
I laugh with them just to feel cool,
whilst inside, I'm slowly dying.
Looking at your drunk father, desperately
trying to amuse your friends, isn't any fun,
I can tell you that much.

Looking at him, lying there on the couch,
sleeping like a big grizzly bear, almost passed out.
Try to wake him to ask if he can drive me some place,
but what's the point? He's not in any state of mind to
drive anyone anywhere.

It's not even about the fun any more,
it's his lifestyle.
Night after night, he comes home,
the clock has past midnight,
we've put ourselves to sleep.

No one to look up to,
no one to seek comfort in.
He's become your dumb
irresponsible friend,
no father, no more.
#2
How much though have you put into this?
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#4
sounds good.....? lol
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#5
I would describe this as my own "mama said" even though I don't have the writing talent James has . That's directed to you That_hot_Guy, you better understand it! :P
#6
Writing about what person does when hes drunk isnt really writing music unless you can articulate the deeper meanings. say something like 'why does a person pick up alcohol?' or 'whats wrong with their state of mind' or 'would he have it any other way' something like that. In a form of poetry or lyrics and NOT a narrative.

and why would you ask a drunk to drive you home?
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#7
James wrote lines like "I need your arms to welcome me/but a cold stone is all I see" on that song and this is far from. No offence, but 'Mama Said' is a bad example right here.
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Jim Dunlop Crybaby 535Q
#8
I didn't mean it as that MonsterOfRock, I ment it at a personal level. btw: thanks for all the good pointers, I will get some deeper meanings and methaphors into it, so it's not so much "straight lines"