#1
As I sink deeply into your eyes
The words get lost in my mind
As we slowly dance through the night
I hold you tight
And realize that this is the moment I’ve been waiting my whole life
With this hopeless romantic finally finding true love this time

Take my hand
And just pull me in
To a moment when nothing is real
When your beat’s the only thing I feel
As I hold you close
It’s your touch I suppose
That can freeze my every moment
I hope you believe me when I meant

That I love you

As we sway gently in time
I look in your eyes
Holding back countless rivers of tears
You must’ve seen mine
With my half closed composure of smiling keeping my eyes not as wide

Take my hand
And just pull me in
To a moment when nothing is real
When your beat’s the only thing I feel
As I hold you close
It’s your touch I suppose
That can freeze my every moment
I hope you believe me when I meant

And now the songs drawing to a close
I hear your whispering pleas
Of “please don’t let me go”,
“Just another minute and youll know”

If you

Take my hand
And just pull me in
To a moment when nothing is real
When your beat’s the only thing I feel
As I hold you close
It’s your touch I suppose
That can freeze my every moment
I hope you believe me
I know you believe me
I just want to yell out that I meant

That I love you.
#2
I really like it. I think it flows well and I totally get the feelings your trying to convey. In fact I just had my homecoming this past weekend and your song pretty much summed up the feelings I had. The lines,Take my hand/And just pull me in/To a moment when nothing is real/When your beat’s the only thing I feel/As I hold you close/It’s your touch I suppose/That can freeze my every moment, are just so true when you are in love. All in all I think it's good.
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#4
Wow. That is very nicely done. As previously noted, love songs are difficult to write without resorting to cliches, but you have pulled it off beautifully. I really enjoy the fact that it is readable but still almost carries a melody along with it, like the words are singing without music. Well Done.