I liked the feel of the song. It has a U2 kinda a feel to it and I'm a big U2 fan. I couldn't understand anything you were singing though. And that made it hard to get the wholg songs vibe. I guess I would say, rerecord it with some clearer vocals and some drums.

Keep it up!!

Crit this please:

Keep at it... make sure you do silence cuts to get out of the hiss from tracks that are not currently playing anything...

As for the vocals I like the vibe your going for make the vocals a bit more understandable but keep that style....

The bass is good and distinguishable.

Overall good job, keep recording and gather some better gear down the road.