#1
Most of my writings are without titles... This one's fairly recent. It may seem "minimal" to a lot of you, but that's the idea. Personal interpretations are encouraged, as are title suggestions.

5/13/08

suspended between
two infinities
pushing liquid tension
sound waves (amenities)

this charge
discharge
return to me
and you will see
eternity

hourglass building pyramids
a slave for the will of the mind
turn it upside down
from the ground up
is this your spill
or mine?

framed crystal web
legs spinning around
intricate designs
of sexuality abound

with sound
Last edited by Divided_Eye at Nov 25, 2008,
#3
the only thing i didn't like was the second last stanza.
"framed crystal web
legs spinning around
intricate designs
of sexuality abound"

It just felt a bit like filler to me. This is a very solid piece, flows lovely and is very easy to read. My favourite stanza is:
"this charge
discharge
return to me
and you will see
eternity"
That's just fantastic
#5
I love the flow, It's like a liquid, with shards of imagery floating like glass on the top. Brilliant.
#6
that was actually pretty good
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#7
I loved it, brilliant work!
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#8
Really good!

My favorite stanza:

this charge
discharge
return to me
and you will see
eternity

short and sweet and deep, sounds like my Saturday night =P anyway...great job!