#1
" Poor stick in the mud,
Oh,You fell in the puddle.
I shall get you out."


what you think?
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Last edited by nowa90 at Oct 22, 2008,
#2
I thought the stick was in the mud.

How did it fall into a puddle?

Did it fall horizontally?
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#3
Quote by Lithium717
I thought the stick was in the mud.

How did it fall into a puddle?

Did it fall horizontally?
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#4
Why is it that you only decided to pick up the stick after you noticed that it was in a puddle, and not the mud. Was the stick not worth the kindness of being picked out of the mud if it meant you getting your hands dirty?
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#5
nowa90 rocks
he can write a good haiku
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#6
hm this is quite an enigma actually. this could be seen as an anthemic haiku that stands for loyalty, for friends who will always be there to 'pick you up out of the puddle'

although, it doesnt make sense

if the stick was in the mud, it would have been dirty. falling in a puddle of water would have helped clean it.

did you pick up the stick after you cleaned it? surely you did

of course you did

its the equivalent of helping a friend get through a drug addiction

the stick (your friend) is in the mud (addicted to drugs)
the stick (your friend) falls in the puddle (decides to turn his life around)
you pick the stick back up (you help your friend through his troubles)

great piece, great meaning

would you take a look at one of mine? theyre in my sig

EDIT: oh yeah, you looked at one of mine, but said youd crit it later. take a look at the 3rd song in my sig instead, its a whole lot shorter
Last edited by jetfuel495 at Nov 7, 2008,