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This is a very happy piece. But with the lead you have it would make a really great build up piece. The chords your playing in the background are good but don' t really match. Don't get me wrong... The first 2 bars are fine but bars 3-4 ruin the song and make it seem way too jolly. I like how you dip into the dark side with the pre-chorus but I would make it so that your transitions are better from 16-17. It just sounds bad when a pre-chorus comes out of no where when you playing chords. Still this has potential.

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