#2
i know ur aware of it but I can't focus on the song when the timing is so strange....it just seems wrong where it might be kinda cool if it was played a little more in the pocket....
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#3
repetitive,
but repetitive is catchy,
stop it , and go back at it later, people like to wait for a catchy chorus in a song that's pure out simple and long.
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#4
well to be brutally honest, the idea is solid and i can see where you are going with it... its a little repetitive though. the leads on it seemed a bit rushed and didnt really flow smoothly. keep working on it and it should be a good piece.
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#5
The halfstep interval between the 1st and second note on bass part seems kinda weird against the lead part. And it would sound a lot better if the picking were more fluid, work on your tone as well, it's kinda tough on the ears.

Bad stuff aside, it's a nice idea, great start. Can't wait to hear where you go with it ^-^ good luck!


P.S. i like nameless, very catchy, slap some vocals to that shizz and you got yourself a legit song!
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The halfstep interval between the 1st and second note on bass part seems kinda weird against the lead part. And it would sound a lot better if the picking were more fluid, work on your tone as well, it's kinda tough on the ears.

Bad stuff aside, it's a nice idea, great start. Can't wait to hear where you go with it ^-^ good luck!


P.S. i like nameless, very catchy, slap some vocals to that shizz and you got yourself a legit song!



thanks. I wasn't worried about the tone or anything like that at this point. I just wanted to get it out and down. Thanks though! (glad you like nameless)

@zakk: The lead I came up with when I was just listening to the song and noodling around a bit. I'm hoping to make it tighter, and maybe get a variation each bar on it(in the verse/chorus) to make it more interesting.

@68_SG: I'll keep that in mind. I have a few other songs I'm kinda working on, so I'll try going back to this one in a bit.

@TheEarthisFlat: Ya. When I recorded, the latency actually moved the track forward in time in the recorder, so I had to go back and do it by hand. It was really annoying, so I just tried to get it close.

Thanks! Keep em coming!