#1
Hey guys, this is my latest one, I called it Layers because that's mostly what I did, layer instruments over each other, I've been sort of working on it on and off for a while now, basically I've thrown in a lot of my influences with little regard for whether or not it actually fitted in with the song, but whatever, I'm happy with it.
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#2
good song, though I am not certain if those basschords sound that good in reality The solo is a bit standard too.
But I really liked the rest!

Is it instrumental or has it got vocals over it?
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#3
I liked it, some of it reminds me of Tiger Woods PGA Tour 2004 menu music .
#4
=O to measure 32. Incredible moment. This song is brilliant. Very good job with it man. I would loveee to hear this I love it man.

Oh and that one song is updated if you wanna comment again.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=974448
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#5
Quote by Neo Evil11
good song, though I am not certain if those basschords sound that good in reality The solo is a bit standard too.
But I really liked the rest!

Is it instrumental or has it got vocals over it?


Probably instrumental, since I'm not really very good at making vocals.
#6
Cool song. It started out kinda Jazz sounding, then switched to metal-ish sounding riffs and a solo that seemed to be a tie between the metal and jazz sounds. Ending with a stronger version of the first theme is also cool. If i were you, i might shorten the bass breaks though.
#8
I love it. Hell of a lot of tapping though...
I like the fact you've used the bass guitar alot, and it's not just a backing instrument like in most bands...
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#9
Wow, it's really awesome.
I like at bar 32, how the strings and guitar fade in together.
From bar 41-52, the bass was a bit out off key, which I'm sure you intended, but it didn't really work for me.
The following bass riff was pretty awesome though. A nice break.
The guitar solo, while again off key, as intended, I'm sure, was really good. And the following break at bar 74 was really awesome.
The bass riff after that was really awesome, and gave it a electro sounding feel (that might just be my speakers though, but it worked).
The bass chord bit was not my favourite bit of the song, but worked to lead onto the drums taking over for a bit, until the next guitar riff. All good.
The bass riff afterwards was quite nice, giving a rather happy feeling to the rest of the song, and the synth and guitar backing it up was completely awesome.
The outro was beautiful. I loved it.
Great work.
#10
Ah yes, the intro leads remind of The Fall of Troy.
Everything about this screams prog.
It's very well composed and nothing really appears to be wankerish aside from the solo.
Nevermind, solo's good. There's a spacy theme to it that makes it stand out.

I love how the bass plays such a dominant role, instead of being pushed back.

That outro is so dreamy and relaxing. Damn it's good.
But you should ended a stronger chord.
The abrupt stop to this atomspheric part just kills it.
I wanted moar!

Anyone, you made excellent use of motifs and layering.

9/10.

Would you like to take a look at some of my stuff?
Preferably Elonia, as it's a brand new song.
#11
holly hell dude, that was amazing!

who were your infulences? i would love to hear them!!!

im just in shock at how amazing it was.....well done mate, well done indeed
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#12
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holly hell dude, that was amazing!

who were your infulences? i would love to hear them!!!

im just in shock at how amazing it was.....well done mate, well done indeed


Wow, thanks a lot that means a lot coming from you dude. As for my influences, there's a lot of musicians really, The Fall Of Troy, The Mars Volta, Aphex Twin, Modest Mouse, Necrophagist, Tool, a lot really, haha, although some may be more apparent than others.

Thanks to everybody else for their crits also, very much appreciated, if I haven't already I'll crit you guys back as soon as possible.
#13
Hey man, ive only just registered here and happened to stumble across your song and damn is it good.

I love it, in fact, im gona learn the bass to it so I can have a play along haha

Love to hear more stuff from you
#14
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Wow, thanks a lot that means a lot coming from you dude.

what do you mean by that mate? it has been puzzling me for a while
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#15
Critting as I listen...


Tapping intro is phenomenal. Got me interested right from the beginning. Drums sounded good, in place. The Acoustic guitar got lost in the mix, which leads me to believe that this may become a problem in the song, if it's happening so early... but we'll see... Bass was good.

Second section, the notes were good, a good continuance from the section before it.

The distortion sounded good for the intro section, drums were incredible. The notes in bars 41-whenever those notes stopped were great, they added a bunch. I'm not quite sure why your tapping them all however, but, whatever. The drums, when they came in, weren't that great.

Bass/Drum thingy (I wouldn't call it a solo) wasn't bad, but it totally changed the mood.

The next riff takes the song in a more tech/prog/core area. It's not bad, and works well as a change.

The solo that followed was....OK. It wasn't bad, but didn't have anything particularly interesting going on. It reminded me of.... (please don't kill me...) Malmsteen.

The next part seemed almost tribal to me, and the chords sounded good. I think that some keyboard overlay there would have sounded good. Just a thought. The drums weren't bad, when they emerged, but you were using those cymbals a bit much

When the guitar came back in, It was really good. But, you have like 15 guitar tracks. Throw in some backing chords, to make it sound fuller. It's necessary.

The next bass/drum section was alright... but didn't really sound that great. The guitar came in, and in my head, I was just like "so?". It's not bad, but really, you can cut that section out.

Then it's just bass again, which isn't bad.... and that intro part again, which has become my favorite part of the song.


All in all, although my comments probably seem mostly negative, I think it was really good. I enjoyed it, and would give it an 8.5/10.

Would you care to crit mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1028624

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#16
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what do you mean by that mate? it has been puzzling me for a while


I've noticed your compositions on the forum, and I really liked them, so it means a lot to me that someone who makes music that I enjoy thinks so highly of something I've made
#18
Jesus! That was amazing!. Everything was perfect together, and nothing sounded out of place. The constant genre hopping makes it a very interesting song, and it never sounded like "4 songs stuck together". The bass/drum transition/break was great the first couple of times, but then on the third it sort of got a bit bland. Fantastic work!

9/10.
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#20
This is quite original, at least compared to any of the stuff i ve heard on here.
i just don't like the solo part with arpeggios. u can call me hater or whatever. and YES i can't play it, but thats not the reason i don't like it. i just don't like the sound of it.
but besides that, this song is awesome
#21
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This is quite original, at least compared to any of the stuff i ve heard on here.
i just don't like the solo part with arpeggios. u can call me hater or whatever. and YES i can't play it, but thats not the reason i don't like it. i just don't like the sound of it.
but besides that, this song is awesome


Fair enough, to each their own, thanks for the input, glad you enjoyed it.
#22
I thought it was insane
Very...I don't know haha. I like it though
Although is that arpeggios riff thing... starting at bar... 97...possible? I love it but can't imagine playing it

7/10
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#23
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I thought it was insane
Very...I don't know haha. I like it though
Although is that arpeggios riff thing... starting at bar... 97...possible? I love it but can't imagine playing it

7/10


Yeah, that part's meant to be tapped, I forgot to put that in there, it's not too difficult once you get it down though. Thanks for the input, got anything you'd like me to crit?
#25
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I love how the bass plays such a dominant role, instead of being pushed back.

I know its awesome!

Anyways, the intro (and title) kinda reminded me of textures by cynic. Really cool. Very original work. Pretty much Id have to say flawless. The only thing I can think of is try combining some of the tracks to make it easier to read. The only music related thing I can suggest is for the outro keep it goin another 8 bars or so with just guitar and drums then hold that note. The bass makes it to driving to be an ending.

I don't say this often... but

10/10

If you want crit my song too, its simmilar genre
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1189517
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Edit: If you guys ever release a CD or demo PM me. Ill buy it.
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