#1
This is my first song and i could really use some constructive criticism, its sort of a pop 'rock' genre, Reply Plz

Intro/Verse

It was a Sunny day
When i saw you there
Couldnt say a word
Looked each other in the eye
When i thought it was a dream
You walked away

Chorus

And its all clear now
I dont know how
But it lookes like
I missed my chance

Verse 2

It would have been great
I guess it’s too late
For you and me
But Just in case
Ill remember your face

Chorus

But its all clear now
I dont know how
But it lookes like
I missed my chance

Verse 3

Theres still hope
The chances are small
Just know this
When we have it all
Last edited by MrBay92 at Oct 25, 2008,
#2
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