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Hi, i'm a new member to the board. Been playing for about 7 weeks. I am still learning chords so I don't have them yet for this song.

I wrote this song about my ex-girlfriend. She's the only girl I ever loved. I didn't want to start writing love songs so this will probably be the only one for a while! Besides, I don't want all my music to sound depressing. Anyway....

I wrote this because we've been broken up for a few years and we're not close anymore, and I've made several attempts to get together just to hang out and it's like pulling teeth. We've only hung out a few times over the last few years (all my idea) and I kept asking myself questions and whether it was even worth it to have her in my life.

The lyrics are over half-done so please give me feedback and let me know if it's worth finishing.

"WITHOUT YOU"

VERSE 1:

I can't help it, I think about you every day..
and all the good times we had.. but anyway....
what does it matter? all that's white has turned to grey...
and I looked around but, nobody else could take your place.
I said that I loved you, but I guess it was too late...
you had already made up your mind, there's no chance it would change.

CHORUS:

I wish I could read your mind, to always know what you're thinking -.
and i'm not afraid to ask, "why can't I stop drinking???"
so tell me, Where did I go wrong, that I had to write this song?
And why am I so sad when I know that you aren't?.......
Why can't we go back in time? Why can't we do it all again?
Why did I have that talk with you that caused it all to end.
and where are you right now, and are you with someone new?...
If I have so many questions... am I better off without you?

VERSE 2:

I couldn't take it.. I had to move away...
then I started to drink, and things were not the same.
I cried every single night, and I wasn't in my own bed,
I wished that I could go back in time, and undo what I said.
I layed by my phone at night, and waited for your call,
and all I needed was to hear your voice, so that I could fall..... asleep... so tell me..

CHORUS 2/ALT LINE:

Why did you take me back, and then dump me all over again?
and why did twist the knife when you took all my friends?

VERSE 3:

I started to work out, but I would have anyway...
sure I had hopes, you'd admire my 6 pack one day...
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