#1
an acoustic song very simple three chords with a little run at the end of every line, capo on 4th, electric guitar solo somewhat bluesy in the middle, c4c, leave a link

why am i always down
when will it be my final frown
the bottle now lay empty by my bed
as your words run through my head
i hope you know i always loved you
knew i could never live without you
i see you all laughing at me
your words like knifes that attack me

time is moving so slow
i cant stop now dont care if i go

the sun is up it early in the morning
consider this my final warning
im leaving now and i wont be back
these colors all fading to black
a man at my door a silhouette
its clear to me now all our paths are set
there isnt much that we can do
try to enjoy your life and admit when its through

time is moving so slow
i cant stop now its time for me to go

peace
#4
Quote by sublime4evr


why am i always down
when will it be my final frown
the bottle now lay empty by my bed
as your words run through my head
First Four Lines Good
i hope you know i always loved you
knew i could never live without you
i see you all laughing at me
your words like knifes that attack me
Although you finish each two lines off with the same word it doesnt sound repetitive i like that


time is moving so slow
i cant stop now dont care if i go
No crit

the sun is up it early in the morning
consider this my final warning
im leaving now and i wont be back
these colors all fading to black
Good last line a bit Cliche
a man at my door a silhouette
its clear to me now all our paths are set
there isnt much that we can do
try to enjoy your life and admit when its through
I dont really like the last line here i dont know why though i think its just because its so long mabey change it to 2 lines

time is moving so slow
i cant stop now its time for me to go




Overall its good
But i dont really like the last verse so mutch.
Also i like the 2 lines inbetween each verse.
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