#1
So this is my first post ever on here. I've been an avid fan of the site, but didn't become a member till today. Enough of that...anyways, I thought I would just post a set of lyrics I came up with a little while back. It's simple and to the point. It was somewhat inspired by a girl I knew who kinda tried to control everything and lost a lot due to it, but somehow put up a false front and continued to act like everything was ok. Enough back-story, I'm not sure if this is the most final version of it, so if a couple of things seem awkward, then they probably are, haha. It's a very simple song and sounds better with music, I'm sure.

Put On a Smile

*Verse 1*
You wish the world would,
Work how you planned it.
Your friends would take you,
Open-handed

*Chorus*
Put on a smile,
And pretend like you want to.

*Verse 2*
You try to act open,
So open minded.
You "know" the world,
So you try to define it.

*Chorus*
You put on a smile,
And pretend like you want to.

*Instrumental Bridge*

*Verse 3*
Soon your perfect plan will,
Be left shattered and broken.
Soon all your friends will,
Leave unspoken.

*Final Chorus*
But you put on a smile,
And pretend like you want to.


Hope this didn't give anyone a headache or cause instant nausea. Let me know what you think.
#2
Put On a Smile

*Verse 1*
You wish the world would,
Work how you planned it.
Your friends would take you,
Open-handed (or…with more understanding?)

Needs another verse

For the chorus maybe…

*Chorus*
You put on a smile
So the world smiles back at you
You think it’s a sign
You can do what you want to
When it turns to disaster
You run for denial
Make it all disappear
When you put on your smile


*Verse 2*
You try to act open,
So open minded.
You "know" the world,
So you try to define it.

Needs another verse

And then…

*Chorus*
You put on a smile
Or pretend like you want to
The world thinks it’s a sign
So the world smiles back at you
When it turns to disaster
You run for denial
And it’s all we expect
When you put on your smile


*Instrumental Bridge*

*Verse 3*
Soon your perfect plan will,
Be left shattered and broken.
Soon all your friends will,
Leave unspoken.

*Final Chorus*
But you put on a smile,
And pretend like you want to.


I like where your going here but I just thought it need more filling. Seemed a little too short. Good job.

C4C
A Like Mind Is Born
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=987765
#3
Thanks for the help! I'll try and expand the verses a little, but I think I'm going to leave the chorus alone. I guess it's just one of those things where you have to hear it with the music to understand. I'll try and take a look at your lyrics as soon as I can!