#1
Im i nthe process of writing this song Not sure of the name yet. It's about someone. kind of emotional for me but whatever.
here it goes.


When i am counting the stars at night
I include her in the number
and thats about when i lose count

If i could properly tell you how i feel
well id yell it out louder then bombs

I am trying to think of the right thing to say
even if it's not charming in anyway

But, if it makes sense can you give me recognition
because thats the best i can do.


that is al li got so far. Let me know what you think so far?
#3
'I am trying to think of the right thing to say
even if it's not charming in anyway'

That's a great line. The bombs metaphor seems to ruin it a bit though
#4
Good. Although, I thought it a bit odd that one verse rhymed while the others did not?