#1
A while back a wrote an amazing peice of genius on here and someone didn't like it so I said I would write a song to them called death wont die till you're dead from deaths deadliness. and here it is. I don't remember who it was so this song can be dedicated to everyone who doesn't understand my art. in other words everyone. get ready to be deadlinessed

style of death metal ish


you got a problem with your typing hand
should've just left it but you had to be the man
said some shit to me that wasn't real nice
now I call upon death to make you pay the price

you can't run from death, you can't get away
you can't hurt death but if you could it'd like it anyway
deaths gonna rape you like I raped your mother
and you're about to feel pain like no other
coz

death wont die till you're dead from deaths deadliness
wrap my fingers round your skull and crush your headliness
think I'm not ready? I'll show you all my readiliness
Death wont die till you're dead from deaths deadliness


I hate you more than a ********
you're a second from feeling the pain again
I'll use my music as a weapon to take you out
and by music I mean a mother****ing AK47 bitch

you can't hide from death coz it'll find you
you'll never see it when it comes up from behind you
unless of course it comes up from in front of you
but that would just be stupid, it'll definitely come up from behind you


death wont die till you're dead from deaths deadliness
wrap my fingers round your skull and crush your headliness
think I'm not ready? I'll show you all my readiliness
death wont die till you're dead from deaths deadliness


death, death, death, death wont die
death wont die but you sure as **** will ******
death, death, death, death wont die
death wont die because it is a concept with no physical form which therefore makes it impossible to kill

fin

nothing rhymes with lithuanian, i ****ing tried alright
#3
This was just bad.

Chorus was terrible; rhymes were terrible. Drop the nigga and lithuanian lines... they're racist and dumb. To be honest, there wasn't much redeeming about this from a poetic or lyrical standpoint. You've essentially expressed nothing that couldn't be summed up in the line "I hope you die" and then rambled on about it for 20+ lines. You used horribly forced rhymes, said death more than 10 times and your last line is so atrocious that it makes babies cry at night.

seriously though, lose the racist parts or I will close this.

-zC
#7
see, no one understands me, I'll deadliness you all mother****ers

also I don't see how making up a word just so it'll rhyme with the previous line is forcing rhymes, I wasn't forcing at all I was helping the word 'head' discover the rhyming potential it never knew it had
#8
death wont die because it is a concept with no physical form which therefore makes it impossible to kill

Best part. The rest wasn't so great. I know you were trying to be funny but I didn't even smile until that last line.
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Alright... headliness got me too
Last edited by King ofKumbucha at Oct 30, 2008,
#9
yeah other than a couple of lines it was all pretty stupid, i was bored at work so i didnt exactly have time to weave a masterpiece.
#10
Quote by nick_kcin
yeah other than a couple of lines it was all pretty stupid, i was bored at work so i didnt exactly have time to weave a masterpiece.

Funny thing is, I could use gutturals and you would have no idea how dumb the words are anyway.