#1
This is my song about the modern day hypocrisy of religion in matters of law. How religions postulate for forgiveness and redemption yet call for laws and policies that offer none. There is a real disconnect between humans on the outside and in the system and an absolute denial that we are each equally capable of infinite goodness and absolute evil. I find a lot of wisdom in religious writings however ones religion and their belief in it can both be accurately judged by their actions. So if your religion is full of love and forgiveness and redemption then all I ask is show me through your action…and don’t make me pay for the privilege. I have a few friends that would appreciate the mercy. C4C! Leave Link.

Throwing Stones

My reputation became my last supper
Now I stare at an empty plate
How dare they take it all away
Over one mistake

The people who pray to their God
For mercy to forgive their sins
Are the same who take your life away
And never give it back again

In his name, in his name, in his name, use his name!

(Chorus)
Can’t a man get sympathy?
Throwing stones at my felony, yeah
How many times will you rape me?
Throw your stones at my felony, yeah


Chameleon society
Changing color with the hierarchy
Your position in this mockery
Is the glass through which you see

Yeah, the blind give the warning
And a vision is proclaimed
Your demigods carry the flag
And the truth dies in vain

In his name, in his name, use his name, in his name!

(Chorus)
Can’t a man get sympathy?
Throwing stones at my felony, yeah
How many times will you rape me?
Throw your stones at my felony, yeah


Who is pure enough to cast me down?
Who will sacrifice to set me free?
Which do you think is more God-like?
Will either insure your eternity? Yeah!

Proclaim in his name, use his name, in his name, and profane his name!
#2
My reputation became my last supper
Now I stare at an empty plate
How dare they take it all away
Over one mistake
The whole supper and plate thing doesn't work for me on this verse. I'd do something else.

The people who pray to their God
For mercy to forgive their sins
Are the same who take your life away
And never give it back again

In his name, in his name, in his name, use his name!
I'm definitely diggin the second verse, and this little "in his name..." line before the hook is killer!

Can’t a man get sympathy?
Throwing stones at my felony, yeah
How many times will you rape me?
Throw your stones at my felony, yeah
The Hook is not bad, but I would change the "How many times will you rape me?" part, cuz it ruins it for me, and is pretty bad. I would use somethig like...
Try to change what you see in me
Throwing stones at my felony.


Chameleon society
Changing color with the hierarchy
Your position in this mockery
Is the glass through which you see
1st 2 lines don't flow as well as the last two. Could be the big words you chose and my inability to put them together?

Yeah, the blind give the warning
And a vision is proclaimed
Your demigods carry the flag
And the truth dies in vain

In his name, in his name, use his name, in his name!
Meh, it's ok. Again this little "in his name, in his name is what sells it.

Who is pure enough to cast me down?
Who will sacrifice to set me free?
Which do you think is more God-like?
Will either insure your eternity? Yeah!

Proclaim in his name, use his name, in his name, and profane his name!
Best verse of the whole song.
#3
Dragan187,

Working on the first verse and yeah I like your idea about "change what you see in me". I used "how many time will you rape me" to convey what they feel every time they go to get a job, or are considered for any higher station in life. It's like, sorry, you made one mistake, you're no good any more. In this way, the sentence never ends. It's a life sentence. So where is the supposed redemption and payment to society? Good crit!
#5
Quote by IamOmega


Throwing Stones

My reputation became my last supper
Now I stare at an empty plate
How dare they take it all away
Over one mistake
I'm liking the use of metaphors in this one alot. Wonder use of words here and good way to explain it.

The people who pray to their God
For mercy to forgive their sins
Are the same who take your life away
And never give it back again
I think I get what this one is about, and I like it. Like the first one, I think that your use of words are outstanding :]

In his name, in his name, in his name, use his name!
Cool prechorus :p

(Chorus)
Can’t a man get sympathy?
Throwing stones at my felony, yeah
How many times will you rape me?
Throw your stones at my felony, yeah

The chorus feels like it could be expanded a bit, I mean, I like it. I just think it leaves more to be desired

Chameleon society
Changing color with the hierarchy
Your position in this mockery
Is the glass through which you see

Yeah, the blind give the warning
And a vision is proclaimed
Your demigods carry the flag
And the truth dies in vain
This is the same I would say for the first two, I love your vocabulary. And you actually have a similar writing stye to me, just way more...complete, or solid

In his name, in his name, use his name, in his name!

(Chorus)
Can’t a man get sympathy?
Throwing stones at my felony, yeah
How many times will you rape me?
Throw your stones at my felony, yeah


Who is pure enough to cast me down?
Who will sacrifice to set me free?
Which do you think is more God-like?
Will either insure your eternity? Yeah!

Proclaim in his name, use his name, in his name, and profane his name!
I like the outro alot, nothing crazy to say about it, I just like it alot. Overall a very solid song, you did an amazing job, and you have a deep message mixed in it all. You have strong views on the world and this song shows it.


I owe you a critique, don't think I forgot about you :]