#1
So basically, I wrote my first lyrics today. It's for a song that's mostly instrumental (there are only two verses of vocals), but I'd like some feedback on them, seeing how I'm new to this and all.


In an empty room
Behind a locked door
He lives
Painting a landscape of nowhere

Blank canvas stares back at him
Mocking his uncertainty
He snaps
Becoming a self-portrait of no one
#2
I like what you have done, I think if you wanted this could be developed into a full song.
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