Just because it's Nirvana inspired dosn't mean it has to sound like Nirvana, it would if it was a Tribute to them or something. I have to agree on the other points, the the parts don't compliment each other, they seem to clash at several points. I think you need to brush up on some basic harmony and scales. Then use that knowledge on something bit more coherent.

If you have a chance can you crit my latest peice?

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