#1
About the first half of a new song. No drums. Lots of material, not much structure though. Thought I'd just put it up to get a crit on what I have so far. Only my second song so I need as much advice as I can get.
Thanks In advance.
C4C =D
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Last edited by Dethkreep at Nov 3, 2008,
#2
You pretty much said it yourself man, you have a lot of good ideas here, but there isnt much structure, I would like to hear drums over a lot of it. The intro is cool, are those dissonant harmonies intentional? They might not sound the same on live instruments. Bar 31 is epic as hell, I would have loved to hear more out of that part. MIDI church organ isnt quite my cup of tea lol :p. The last minute or so of it is a bit repetitive.

Overall, nice work. There are definitely some awesome ideas in there, you should totally develop that bar 31 part into an entire song. Peace man
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#3
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You pretty much said it yourself man, you have a lot of good ideas here, but there isnt much structure, I would like to hear drums over a lot of it. The intro is cool, are those dissonant harmonies intentional? They might not sound the same on live instruments. Bar 31 is epic as hell, I would have loved to hear more out of that part. MIDI church organ isnt quite my cup of tea lol :p. The last minute or so of it is a bit repetitive.

Overall, nice work. There are definitely some awesome ideas in there, you should totally develop that bar 31 part into an entire song. Peace man


Yeah, the harmonies are intentional. I don't know what they're called but I'm assuming those kind have a name because I hear them in a lot of metal. They sound cool as hell on real instruments =D. Yeah I quite like the bar 31, kind of explodes into distortion, fun part. And yeah now that I think about I think I could expand it quite a bit. I think Im gonna get rid of that last arpeggio section too. Just too much Church Organ arpeggios... Thanks for the review. You gave me a bit of useful perspective, and thats what I need alot of the time when I get too worried about if what Im writing sounds good lol.
#4
i can hear a heavy black metal influence (and abit of "CORE" in there). im not sure if ur doing on purpose but its so dissonant, almost too dissonant. i think it just that semitone drop that making it sound bad. in saying that though there are some cool riffs but u seriously should arrange it and add drums , i look forward to hearing the final product.
#5
Which part do you think is too dissonant? In the intro? Or somewhere else? Sorry just unclear on where you meant. My last goal is to make it too core =[. Thanks for critting =D.