#1
Lyrics, by me:

I claw and I weep as it comes up and rapes me/ Still never stopping I pray against the/
Flow that a hole in the hull might save us/ The tiniest gap where the air can fill my lungs/ Because my heart’s beating faster and faster/ And I fear the worst / Pray for mercy I ask her,

Why?

And now my friends fall silent again/ As the boat that we’re in rolls end over end/ We believed in a god may have abandoned us/ Try as we might/ Our souls may outlive us.

I succumb/ Feel the sea as it enters my lungs/ My heart/ My god/ I’d never believe it/
Try as you may/ I’m still here today.

The Salt Stings.
#2
Great stuff, much better than most of the tripe displayed here. Continue the good work, there are amazing lines here.