#1
Haven't posted anything in awhile, have this strange urge to do so. Will read and reply those helpful commenters.


Cleansing

I had a friend who recently lost it, tried to keep
her house clean didn't care what it costed.
She saw bugs in the corners, walls covered
in crawlers, kept her roomates up late
with her handclaps killing scum
in the dark. all her friends told her
she's gone off the deep end, then they
watched her all weekend as she scrubbed
paint from the walls, up and down narrow
halls of plaster lined with tacky homemade
artifacts of artistry bought from a painter
who cares more about being seen in public
than canvas, her broad strokes go careless
then the eventual "get this?" stare, is
all you're really given. Everything comes
down to the clean or the filthy, but we're
all equally guilty of trying too hard.
#2
Quote by rush4life
Haven't posted anything in awhile, have this strange urge to do so. Will read and reply those helpful commenters.


Cleansing

I had a friend who recently lost it, tried to keep
her house clean didn't care what it costed.
She saw bugs in the corners, walls covered
in crawlers, kept her roomates up late
with her handclaps killing scum
in the dark. all her friends told her
she's gone off the deep end, then they
watched her all weekend as she scrubbed
paint from the walls, up and down narrow
halls of plaster lined with tacky homemade
artifacts of artistry bought from a painter
who cares more about being seen in public
than canvas, her broad strokes go careless
then the eventual "get this?" stare, is
all you're really given. Everything comes
down to the clean or the filthy, but we're
all equally guilty of trying too hard.


Cost.

But its pretty good is about someone goin crazy
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I hijacked this!
#3
Relatable to the point of where I cannot find fault of this because it's such a simple description of someone I know. It's everything, unbiased.
マリ「しあわっせはーあるいってこないだーからあるいってゆっくんだねーん 
いっちにっちいっぽみーかでさんぽ
 さーんぽすすんでにっほさっがるー 
じーんせいはっわんつー!ぱんち・・・


"Success is as dangerous as failure. Hope is as hollow as fear." - from Tao Te Ching

#5
Very cool. Quick and dirty, (no pun intended). I like how it was one paragraph but instead of getting a sense of it running together it felt more like looking at a complete picture. Great buildup to the end.
#6
Thank you for the comments all.

To Dylan: I think I have yet to write an ending I'm truly happy with. It's my greatest weakness.

Also, "costed" is an actual word, though it probably doesn't work in this context. Oh well, it sounds nice, so I don't care,