#1
I can not turn back
I've seen you here before
you maybe just a drive away
or a thousand miles more

Anywhere I've ever gone
And anywhere I've been
Girl I may be leaving
but we can still pretend

(Chorus)
That your here
and your never gonna leave
And every day you'll always be brand new
Can you hear?
My silent invitation
Girl I will go anywhere for you)
(Verse 2)
I'll still wait for you
theres others besides me
with Letters, cars, and photographs
and all things make believe

have it any other way
For a pair like you and me
You Make the broken stand and fall
But blinded eyes can see

(Bridge)
If I told you that I'm scared
Scared of my direction
If I told you that I'm scared
of me
If I told you that I'm scared
of everything.
#2
Quote by spdrpig
I can not turn back
I've seen you here before
You may be just a drive away
or a thousand miles more

Good starting verse, some grammatical stuff, but it catches interest.

Anywhere I've ever gone
And anywhere I've been
I know you want the right, but this is rather redundant.
Girl I may be leaving
but we can still pretend

(Chorus)
That you're here
that you're never gonna leave
And every day you'll always be brand new
Brand new doesn't sit well with me.
Can you hear,
My silent invitation?
Girl I will go anywhere for you

Some more grammar stuff, but it's okay.

(Verse 2)
I'll still wait for you
theres others besides me
with letters, cars, and photographs
and all things make believe

This verse is probably my least favorite. Really not feeling the message the same way I did in the first verse. Who is waiting? And why cars?

Have it any other way
For a pair like you and me
You make the broken stand and fall
But blinded eyes can see

The first three lines are good, but the forth really makes no sense at all. But infers that it is a contradiction or opposite, while blind seeing isn't opposite to broken stand and fall. You could change it to while, but it still draws away from the rest of the line.

(Bridge)
If I told you that I'm scared
Scared of my direction
If I told you that I'm scared
of me
If I told you that I'm scared
of everything.

When did this come in? Scared of being alone would make sense, but why is your character suddenly afraid of things. Scared of my direction doesn't make much sense, given he's supposed to go anywhere for this girl.



Overall, it was okay, started off strong, but the ending left a bit of an aftertase. Great potential, maybe make it longer? It shouldn't end yet XD

C4C? Link is in sig.
#3
Quote by spdrpig

And every day you'll always be brand new
Can you hear?
My silent invitation
Girl I will go anywhere for you)


I really liked this part ha but i dont know why. =]

Buttt

All around it was a good C4C?

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#4
thanks! I agree totally! your write I was very inspired with the beginning but the end seemed to taper a bit, and yes it was a bit random so i'll fix that! Im gonna read ur stuff, you sound very insightful so I'm sure you wont disappoint!