#1
This is my first song, so don't be to harsh if you crit me. I would really like it if you could give some constructive crits. I would be happy to C4C. I was trying to go for a different type of song structure when I was writing this piece.
Attachments:
Farewell.zip
Last edited by Graveworm at Nov 6, 2008,
#3
I don't know how to... I'm new at this.

EDIT: Just found out how to do it. It is also in GP4 now.
Last edited by Graveworm at Nov 3, 2008,
#4
Here is it

You can export it to midi and gp4 by going to Data or Start (Dont know what is it in English, in german its Datei^^) and then export to:

Btw sounds okay, even if its not my music...^^

Edit: Oh, sry^^ i was to slow
Attachments:
New song idea 2.zip
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#5
hhhmmm pretty cool stuff... there's not much to say about it, i like it
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#6
There were lots of good ideas on the song, although there could be a little more variation but im not expert in this style of music so i can't really say.
I liked the 'Egyptian' feeling on some parts.

Overall pretty good song.
#7
Quote by Wesku2
There were lots of good ideas on the song, although there could be a little more variation but im not expert in this style of music so i can't really say.
I liked the 'Egyptian' feeling on some parts.

Overall pretty good song.


Thanks.
#8
i like the intro chord progression, reminds me of something i cant quite put my finger on

bar 43~ is neat

like the revisit of first part

the leads in this song are cool

bar 122~ is awesome

all in all this song is pretty epic, I would love to hear it with drums, that would add a lot to the song. peace
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#10
Intro is cool, if a little repetitive. Reminds me of Opeth. Very dark sounding guitar work in there. I really enjoyed the part starting at bar 19 (i think). Strings are used nicely. The solo is good but make it less repetitive. the bit at 110 is simple but effective. The whole song reminded me of Opeth in fact. It was good, get some drums in there though 8/10.

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#12
Nice! Those are some BIG chords you got there in the clean part. Nice job. Very technical. It got a bit repetitive after a while though. I'll love to hear it with drums .

C4C?
http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=993726
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#13
^ I'm going to crit your piece and thanks for the crit.


UPDATE! I added drums and a few changes to the song! check it out! C4C
#14
sick drums! this can't be your first song :p!
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#15
really liked it. in some places the drums were a little bit unimaginative and in some places they were brilliant. really caught the nile influence in there, and the intro solo was killer! those sweeps starting at 66 were a bit out of place, id delete that but its your choice.

9/10 - great first song