#1
Ok, this is one of my songs, but i decided to let u guys have ur critique on it -_-

this is about my uncle who committed suicide
so yeah


He lived in a world of his own,
His world to us seemed so strange
A loner was what he was called
But we loved him just the same


Strange way boy, ill always love you
Thats why i wrote this memory song
Strange way boy ill always love you
Even though you are gone


His dreams were so big, they touched the sky
Please dear lord please tell me why
He had to leave this wrold so soon
Before even one dream could come true


Strange way boy, ill always love you
Thats why i wrote this memory song
Strange way boy ill always love you
Even though you are gone


You thought no one understood your world,
But we all understood
We only wished that you had shared
Your strange, strange world with us


Strange way boy, ill always love you
Thats why i wrote this memory song
Strange way boy ill always love you
Even though you are gone
Last edited by darkrikku at Nov 6, 2008,
#2
bro i can feel that you poured your heart out on this one....one suggestion though....well its more like an advice

work on it...and then try to re write the lyrics when you feel like you've matured as a sog writer...then it would be awesome
#3
dude, this was like my 2nd song btw, and i have wrote at least 20, so yes i have matured as a song writer, but no, i cant re write the lyrics, it means so much to my mom, whos brother (is who this song is about) killed himself, as i said in a previous post.

i played this at his funeral