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I like the song as a whole, but it is very rough (which isn't really a bad thing for UG). The vocals were patchy, but there were some very good moments. Some of the words were very quiet, though.

The rhythm guitar also needs to be much tighter.

Overall you have something worth working on, though.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=995145
Have a listen to my new stuff. It's in a very similar vein.