#1
I like it a lot
I hope it's nice
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Chuck Schuldiner 1967-2001
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Last edited by Simon Blackwing at Nov 10, 2008,
#2
Hey man, thanks for the crit.

I like this a lot as an intro. Kinda reminds me of how The Fall of Troy would start a song. Chaotic, but structured. Finish it up, this ones got a lot of potential. Great bass in this one too.

A question about your crit on my song, Red Eye Reverie. What about bar 2 is dissonant? If you're sayin that the harmony between the lead and rhythm is dissonant, then my argument is the fact that the lead is the fifth of the rhythm. I dont always like using minor thirds for my harmonies.
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#3
really good intro, sounds upbeat and thrashy, it brought municipal waste to mind. has great potential
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#4
i need ideas for another riffs^^
What's chaotic?

PS=Apollo, i hate dissonances^^, it's on of my problems^^... it's a good song, but for me it needs only a little more work
R.I.P.
Chuck Schuldiner 1967-2001
Ronnie James Padavona 1942-2010
Darrell Lance Abbott 1966-2004
Jon Nödtveidt 1975-2006
Per Yngve Ohlin 1969-1991
Øystein Aarseth 1968-1993
Joe Ptaceck 1973-2010
Ace Börje Thomas Forsberg 1966-2004
#5
'S'good - definately. But there were two things that caught my attention, no .. one, now that I've listened to it a few times over.

The first, for the sake of the curious cat, was that the last 4 notes of say .. bar 12, E-3-5-3-0, didn't seem right to me, timing wise. I guess it was just me, and I've resolved my own conflict with it, so ignore away, hehe.

The second, though, was that even though it's just a short-lived introduction, it's the same riff four times. Maybe on the third time around, go up a step? Or ..hey, maybe you were going to do this when the song kicked off.

All in all, I can't really find a "bad" thing about the song; just my mind playing tricks. Here's hoping this thing will grow. Really, superb job.