Hey guys, This is my first post, was hoping someone could give it a quick crit4crit, muchas gracias amigos! (By the way it is not finished, just an idea I had of a song, think maby there are too many rhymes?¿

I look into your eyes and see,
A hollow stare, glaring back at me,
This love, it could never be,
But my heart and soul disagree.

The passion fades away,
Convince myself I love you day by day,
We run out of things to say,
Still we pretend, it´s all okay.

Time will test our love,
when push comes to shove,
We´ll know what were made of.
Last edited by Leffi83 at Nov 10, 2008,