#1
Fake Life
Copyright (c) 2008 CGB89


{Verse 1}
Melting candles of light,
Blown away like dynamite,
Falling from the stormy air,
Feel your piercing, endless stare.

[Chorus]
Life... Crumbles beneath me,
I... Can't destroy thee,
You.. Begin to shatter,
Life... As if it didn't matter

{Verse 2}
Break through my soul,
Undercover like a mole,
Moving at the speed of sound,
Falling, Falling in to the ground.

[Chorus]

{Verse 1 (Spoken)}

[Chorus]

Any criticism is appreciated
Gear:
Squier Affinity Series Stratocaster
Epiphone G-400
Line 6 Spider
Dunlop Crybaby Wah
BOSS DD-3

"Wish I Had This" Gear:
Guitars- G&L, Gibson, PRS
Amps- Egnater, Bogner
Effects- Fulltone, JHS, Eventide
Last edited by CGB89 at Nov 10, 2008,
#4
Thanks guys. I was thinking a slower song, like off of AiC's Sap.
Gear:
Squier Affinity Series Stratocaster
Epiphone G-400
Line 6 Spider
Dunlop Crybaby Wah
BOSS DD-3

"Wish I Had This" Gear:
Guitars- G&L, Gibson, PRS
Amps- Egnater, Bogner
Effects- Fulltone, JHS, Eventide
#5
Any more crits???
Gear:
Squier Affinity Series Stratocaster
Epiphone G-400
Line 6 Spider
Dunlop Crybaby Wah
BOSS DD-3

"Wish I Had This" Gear:
Guitars- G&L, Gibson, PRS
Amps- Egnater, Bogner
Effects- Fulltone, JHS, Eventide
#7
Where is it cliche???
Gear:
Squier Affinity Series Stratocaster
Epiphone G-400
Line 6 Spider
Dunlop Crybaby Wah
BOSS DD-3

"Wish I Had This" Gear:
Guitars- G&L, Gibson, PRS
Amps- Egnater, Bogner
Effects- Fulltone, JHS, Eventide
#8
I think you need to find originality and not attempt to copy Alice In Chains' lyrics/writing style.
#9
Quote by drummz11
I think you need to find originality and not attempt to copy Alice In Chains' lyrics/writing style.


I think you need to not be a dick.
#10
Quote by CGB89
Where is it cliche???


I personally, would say the only cliche part is the "Undercover like a mole" section.