#1
Burn the Flag

Now why dont we burn the flag
no more stripes and stars
from the dephs of hell
the rights was never ours
Well partriotism is an anchor
and socialism kills the nation
well capitolism is such a drag
and racial matters
will put in the bag
Now why dont we burn the flag
no more stripes and stars
from the dephs of hell
the rights was never ours
We had our chance and we never took
the oppertunity
we had one last galnce
and we never took
the oppertunity
one chance
Well partriotism is an anchor
and socialism kills the nation
well capitolism is such a drag
and racial matters
will put in the bag
Now why dont we burn the flag
no more stripes and stars
from the dephs of hell
the rights was never ours
well sexism isnt a topic
and foreign relation shouldnt even
be brought up
well technology doesnt matter
as long we can blow things up
We had our chance and we never took
the oppertunity
we had one last galnce
and we never took
the oppertunity
one chance
Now why dont we burn the flag
no more stripes and stars
from the dephs of hell
the rights was never ours
Now why dont we burn the flag
no more stripes and stars
from the dephs of hell
the rights was never ours
#3
It's okay, but didn't really do anything for me. What the guy above said is good to, please use structure. If you'll c4c, anything from my sig will work.
#4
I know it's already been mentioned, but it Really structure.
Put commas in to help with flow etc.
Separate them into stanzas/verses/chorus whatever.
That would really help.
Do that and I'll have another look at it.

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#6
I can imagine a Dead Kennedys sort of vibe from the nature of the lyrics. I can sort of see verses and choruses, although as mentioned, form and structure would be helpful in identifying this piece. At that moment, it looks like a long rant.
It's gonna be a blue day
Last edited by perry589 at Nov 15, 2008,