As already stated, the guitar work was very solid and very clear. Always nice to hear that sort of professionalism even in a low budget/concept tune.
I think the lyrics were a bit boring - there's so much focus on the voice, I guess I just feel there was something missing there. The singer also sounded a little stressed when he started pushing it toward the end, but that was just a small thing.
Mixing wise, I think the guitar solo needs to go up a fair bit! I also feel the tune needs to go somewhere, modulate or maybe even just change the strumming pattern. A little bit of variance, however you achieve it - would make this good song great in my opinion. C4C?