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The only stage presence in doom metal is the fact that you're present on the stage.
Put your toe on the pedal while you inhale?
lol didn't Ronald just make a thread a week ago asking for info on doom? He literally hasn't learned anything in three years.
As you said, it's kinda emo, but that doesn't really matter as long as your material is good. which it is, it's actually pretty nice. Personally I think you should work on making your lyrics less..idk how to say..hmm..obvious? It's like you're stating the obvious of what's going on in your mind. Like why can't you follow your dreams etc. But I think that's more of a personal preferance. I really like poetic, and not so "out there" kinda things. Looking at it from another view tho: the fact that in its "obvious/out there" kinda state, it's nice.
I really like the part where it sais"But everyone tells me...
To get back to reality...
That dreams never become true...
... In this society..."
Tho I think you should change the parts where it sais"Tell me please,
What there is left,
To do in this world?
What keeps pople moving on?"
(especially the "what keeps people moving on")
"I don't understand...
Why are some dreams so impossible?
Well I don't care!"
It's all good as an idea, tho slightly cliche. And i guess I don't fancy it too much cuz it's not very symbolic and peotic? (sorry).
But yea, work on it, and it'll become something awesome..Just..play around with the words and stuff (:
"The Inner Atributes"
I'm 16. Age is never an excuse, don't keep saying that expecting anyone to lower their expectations of you. You should want harsh critiques, they help you get better.
No problem btw
You're not nearly as ****ed up as you think you are. So many people have written about murder, especially by knife, that it just has no effect on anybody anymore.
If you talked about tying him to four horses, one for each limb and them whipping the horses so they start running(they would rip off his arms first; the ligaments are weaker than the legs), and he would be dragged by the legs(no arms, raw, severed nerves grinding against the ground) and slowly ripped in half starting at the groin(because eventually the horses would start running opposite ways) and not die until he was ripped up to about midway through his abdomen(vital organs). Or if you had said something about cutting off his toes and shoving them down his throat and then decapitating him and showing him his own body(you are conscious for 8 seconds after being decapitated). Or even killed him with a carrot. Then you would be ****ed up. And then I would be disgusted and freaked out.
But the problem was that I didn't care enough about the killer or the killed for it to affect me.
I have never laughed harder at a lyric before! I hope that you meant for this to be slightly humorous (I assume you did since you mentioned "lol" many times. If this is a parody, then bravo, I nearly peed myself while reading this. Like TMA 2 said, "I runned away with blood in my hands" is absolutely an absurd line, and the ending: "Gonna kill the man over there...
Take the keys, his car, and also that beer!" made me laugh even harder. If you are trying to be serious, I sincerely apologize, but this needs a lot of work! If you want a serious critique, let me know.