I remember it all so vividly like the first time you lit a cigarette in front of me on a cement bridge above the creek The moon light blocked out by all the trees making it too dark to see This line is too long i think. You should just take out "to see" So we just sat there and listened to each other breathe
though your decision’s in your best interest I continue my argument against it with the sentiment of being ten telling my parents "but you just said!" throwing rocks until my arm gives hitting trees with a stick damn right indignant! and with good reason with every right but all in due time
Really strong opening, i liked the ten year old reference
the day you make your declaration my mom tells me grandpa has an aneurism and I realize, finally, our situation reciprocated:
maybe a few too many big words but still not bad
back a couple winters when I was the one shaking my head, offering condolences, and, knowing no way to console you, only watching. as if a boy unwittingly, ripped the wings off an insect and stared dumbfounded as it wriggled
Flipping awesome, well done.
I felt a cold wind while your wax lips dribbled and dripped down your chin. even before cigarettes your body shriveled, thin your whole face melted.
another good verse
as if a small dog cowered, preparing for another hit you shook and shivered
Afraid Of Heights I sleep in the basement because im afraid of heights and the devil plays tricks on me all day and all night every shadow is a trap every blink is a mistake every victory is failure every hope is a fake