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Quote by Td_Nights
Raven Riley.

I was with my Mom.



Lies. No one on here could have met a porn star.
I'd buy the silo for the silo fest then let UG decide.


*cough*Silogroupneedsmoney*cough*
Quote by sk8ordie97
reno 911 anyone?
its stupid but HILARIOUS anyway scrubs and sp ftw and some of their movies and colbert report and daily show
that basically all they ever show so its a pretty good channel


Reno 911 is a hit and miss show. Sometimes it's good, sometimes it's ****.
Quote by NOAH23
Theres a better young 'Blackout' band on myspace btw.

www.myspace.com/theblackout101

They're not that bad imo but thats probably the paedofile in me speaking. Better than Blink182 anyway.


Holy ****, they're not that bad musically. Not my stuff but, not that bad.
Nah


For clarification, my avatar is KMFDM's "Angst" album cover.
Quote by dudetheman
Reality Bites Back is great, how can you hate it?

The part where they had to seduce their moms in the dark was amazing. I ROFLed several times.


Then that one bastard got lucky >:[
Quote by firebreath07
It looks like it's gonna be a flop.
I just can't stand shows on Comedy Central anymore... they're all ridiculous (Reality Bites Back anyone?)

Unless of course, it's scrubs or good ole standup.


I love in the mornings when it's just Comedy Central Presents. Gotta love stand up.


Poor CC, what have you become?
Anybody else catch the premiere on Comedy Central?

What are your thoughts on it?


I originally thought it was going to be utterly stupid, but it did make me laugh here and there.
Quote by Wondergaurd
And Then I Said "no Soap Radio?"hahahahah


BUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA


Whoever didn't get that should feel left out, amirite?
Last time I watched Family guy.
Guys, it's not supposed to be funny.

To contribute: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zyTPWsBEPlw
Quote by National_Anthem
90% of people are arrogant bastards, regardless of religion.


QFT


In fact, sig coming.
Quote by rabidguitarist
Because they're all sluts.

End of discussion.



This
I dance to electronic and industrial music. That's because I just can't ****ing help it.


Besides that, I'm in show choir so I have to.
Every single one of them. We are not 4chan, stop trying.
Quote by toton1989
get a les paul



...... *sigh*
The proper way to clean up ROFL is to grab a bucket full of STFU and splash it around the area. If any ROFL is left, use a bit of GTFO, that should do the trick.
Legalize it then tax it.
Quote by Raven*
There's a myth of why it rains,
And that's when Angels cry.
But now I have to ask myself,
For what reason?, Why?

I like the abcb pattern here, you just don't see that much. You're opening didn't seem like you were trying so hard, and that's great because a lot of people spend hours working on something that's so obviously intended to wow, rather than write spontaneously from the heart. I liked this stanza, don't change it.

I believe they weep for us
And the state of the world we're on.
For changes that are made today,
And things that are far forgone.

Right now, you've established a strong pattern.. which I feel often hinders a poem, because you're forced into perfect rhyming schemes. Try using words that sound sort of similar (Called a slant rhyme], but don't necessarily rhyme [ex: soul & all]. To fit the scheme you've put in, I actually think it needs a bit more "creative" touch... try using a similie or more metaphors, like you did wiht "rain" and "cry". Personification is always adored.

And now, as trouble swells,
So do the Angels' eyes.
The rain starts picking up
To signal our demise.

I enjoy the first two lines, really imaginative. Again the strict rhyme scheme really hinders the poems structure and feel... but you can't exactly mix it up, or it would make it worse. Try being a little more lucid, break a few rules now and then. The last two lines seem kinda bland, and the last line needs 2 or 3 more syllables.

But now the question is,
When will the rain fade away?
And whenever it finally does,
Will we be there to see the day?

Pretty good, not a perfect way to end the whole thing, but it's better than some carefully crafted masterpiece that turns out to be dribble. I think with a little more creativity, you could revise this into something a lot better. It may just be my preference for vivid imagery, but it just didn't make me think too much.. I look forward to reading more. I liked this all in all.

Would you mind critting mine? http://ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=15288544#post15288544


I would like to thank you for that. It's quite hard to get a thorough and truthful crit.
I just lost the game.... damn it.
There's a myth of why it rains,
And that's when Angels cry.
But now I have to ask myself,
For what reason?, Why?

I believe they weep for us
And the state of the world we're on.
For changes that are made today,
And things that are far forgone.

And now, as trouble swells,
So do the Angels' eyes.
The rain starts picking up
To signal our demise.

But now the question is,
When will the rain fade away?
And whenever it finally does,
Will we be there to see the day?
George Bush - Be Surge Hog
Quote by pwnerer
Sand in your vagina?


That's ridiculous, I keep vaginas in my sand. Who would put sand in a vagina and ruin it?
Quote by kaptink
Thats stupid!


...you only need to take the index finger.


That still leaves them with three fingers and a trigger.

Gah, people these days are idiotic.
Quote by MightyAl
How do you disarm a country when people can shoot using their fingertips?


Cut their hands off obviously

Are you that daft? It's a bit too obvious.
I want to know this myself.
Quote by Ibanez2427
Is your name by any chance "Roger Key Ling?"


I say it's Roger Lei King
Jack Thompson - Phantom Jocks

I Cum Blood - Lucid Bloom

IcyHot - Itch yo

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