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Dude, that was some awesome lyricism. i found it quite entertaining.
*NOTE: This song swears a lot.*

WHIPPED
Bobtoast2

This isn't how he chose to live
Feeling whipped and dumber than shit
But it happens 'cause he won't wear the pants
maybe it's time he got off his fat ass

She likes being a dictator
That's the price of dating a *****
Life is awful and he just sucks
He's a dumb****
(Or maybe not)

Chorus
He's whipped and it may never change
The only thing he knows is rage
She's a biatch, and he's the slave
He wonders if he can be saved

Hope fades inside his hollow soul
She wants him to fill a great hole
She knows she has a grip on him
He must pay for the bitch's sin

Doomed from the onset, he stands up
He tells he she has done too much
He shows her that he's not afraid
And in the night, her power drains

Chorus
He's whipped and it may never change
The only thing he knows is rage
She's a biatch, and he's the slave
He wonders if he can be saved

Bridge
The fire is not so bright
How did he sleep at night
Knowing he was just whipped?
He lost all of his friends
This is how all things end
He feels he was gipped

Chorus
He's whipped and it may never change
The only thing he knows is rage
His worst enemy is his fling
Such is the tragic death of kings
For sure, i'd buy that song and crank it up.
Here's some lyrics I wrote. It sounds like grunge, Nirvana-ish. Needs Music, which I'll put in l8r.

Life_is bland
Too much_to demand
Death_ is in command
The World_is damned
Love_is blind
The thing_I'm denied
Drink_the time
What's left_is mine

States of the Mind_ruin your life
if you pay attention to them, then you win your knife
Use them to your advantage, you take them for granted
They'll be your death_Mental mess of antics

Fight_the hand
That brings_what you had
Test_the gland
That Makes_ your sand
Stuff_the lie
You're next_ stupefied
Think_Alibi
Excuse_undermined

States of the Mind_ruin your life
if you pay attention to them, then you win your knife
Use them to your advantage, you take them for granted
They'll be your death_Mental mess of antics

Night_will stand
Enough_to be planned
Lest_it can't
If it_were a plant
Above_the time
In this_goodbye
Now blink_and find
And please_rewind

States of the Mind_ruin your life
if you pay attention to them, then you win your knife
Use them to your advantage, you take them for granted
They'll be your death_Mental mess of antics

Bite_the fanned
Flame in_your rant
Height_the land
of feelin'_and
doves_will fly
Throughout_ the sky light
Speak_you're kind
Soothe me_keep the bind

States of the Mind_ruin your life
if you pay attention to them, then you win your knife
Use them to your advantage, you take them for granted
They'll be your death_Mental mess of antics
Antics crushing, antics flushing
Love gushing, into the rushing
wave of death in the ocean black
destroy it now warp it back
(4x)send it spiraling
The tide of conquering

send it spiraling
the tide of conquering
while I'm wallowing there_
life doesn't care

Hope you like it


It's a day under the big top
when they realize that it's all a fake
The ringmaster asks for a volunteer
By that time, it's too late



A young girl raises her hand
Too bad she didn't know that this would be her last
event to remember, her old life to forget
she never had a moment to try and regret


She followed the ringmaster to a ladder
Leading up to the tight rope above
Demons scoffed at her image then
No one bothered to show her love


Societal Circus_ Your Disintegration
Serves no purpose except annihilation
Its wrath is in the lions' teeth
They put her on the high trapeze
They will bring you to insanity
And you'll have no chance once you're in the sea


Hope is never gone
She knew that this just might be wrong
It took her a long__time
but now she's read between the lines


Curses from the crowd
continue to grow loud
The ringmaster sees her frown he says
"Girl you're goin' down"


She escaped the shell of society
The hell in which very few believe
It's all around you__ev'ryday
Which is the reason she didn't stay

Societal Circus_ Your Disintegration
Serves no purpose except annihilation
Its wrath is in the lions' teeth
They put her on the high trapeze
They will bring you to insanity
And you'll have no chance once you're in the sea


Her choice was to abandon all she knew
The only option with which she'd go through
He said "Curse your lies, forget your dreams"
She said "Life isn't always what you think"
And she left him in the ring
He had no words to sing
Her actions were turning
all those he was burning



Basically the idea of the song is that life is divided into four separate 'arenas'

1. Hell (Satan) trying to ruin our lives-

2. Those engulfed by modern societies

3. Those outside the circus tent

4. God
Dude, that sounds like something Metallica would have done. The deep, disturbing lyrics would sound good with some driving distorted guitar sounds, like enter sandman or master of puppets.

Keep writing, dude.
the lyrics are awesome, like they were written by a true master. The song's got a good vibe to it; it seems like it could be a modern folk song, and it's easier to relate to than all the older ones

Where do you come from, beauty?
how do you see right through me?
Is it too much to ask you to stay
I'll fall down and lie if you go away

I ask a lot of questions, I'd like to know
so I can plan to stay if you wish so
I'm hoping you'll take me up on my offer
I'd hate to see you as a Russian Pauper now

(SHORT GUITAR SOLO)

Will you stay with me, Veronika?
Maybe You'll go back to the land you love
Mother Russia is calling; are you gonna answer
or hang up the phone 'cause I put you in a trance, you're
beautiful, the one for me
the lady I want, the woman I need
The air I breathe, so stay with me
so I won't have to let you go

Veronika, how do you do it
You amaze me and I'm prone
to be in love with you forever
I don't want you to go home
But it's up to you to decide
whether we live or whether I'll cry
in the night, for you my love
someone must've sent you from above

(GUITAR SOLO)

I ask a lot of questions, I'd like to know
so I can plan to stay if you wish so
I'm hoping you'll take me up on my offer
I'd hate to see you as a Russian Pauper now
You write funny lyrics that lift my spirits
Dude, that's an awesome song
i wrote this for anyone who's a diabetic or sugar addict
no real people inspired this sing
just me being stupid


So this guy i know went to a party
'cause it was close to Halloween
We'll always remember good ole Marty
Died from the sugar in the candy bowl

Soon Diabetic shock set in and he fell flat
Oh that's gotta hurt wow he hit his back
on the tile floor at our friend Jenny's house
her mother went and got the broom to clean him in full

chorus
Don't eat the candy or you'll die a horrible death
we can smell the fruitiness on his breath
he felll prostrate down and hit his head
that's when everyone got up and fled

At the funeral everyone wore white
we're not from Japan and you should've seen the sight
Marty woke up from the dead with all of his might
and we had him over for dinner that night

chorus
Don't eat the candy or you'll die a horrible death
Then how will your family react to what the witnesses said
'He died like a hero and by God it was swell'
A sugary suicide sent him down to hell
dude if you make make an album i'm buying it. the song sounds deep and disturbed like metallica, weird like oingo boingo, and humorous like the arrogant worms. keep writing lyrics
dude thats deep. rock on
i wrote a song
i call it "who wrote this note?"


so i got this note from someone
but i'm not sure who
it could be anybody
anyone of you

it was of encouragement
this note that i received
it was from someplace i don't know where
it's tough to even try to care

who wrote this note to me?
c'mon tell me now
is it the girl over there
just let me know how

i narrowed down the possible senders
down to two or three
but it's their identity
that still confuses me
is it her or is it someone else?
should i just not even delve?

who wrote this note to me?
c'mon tell me now
is it the girl over there
just let me know how

so finally i found it was this girl
and i told her ,"i never suspected you"
i began to wonder if it was true
i was shocked that it was what i secretly knew

who wrote this note to me?
c'mon tell me now
is it the girl over there
just let me know how
(repeat)
the first one was just a draft
now with some editing it sounds better
thx greenelephants
this could be put to the same rhythm as Master of Puppets by Metallica or The Trooper by Iron Maiden


I see the future criminals before me
on that Texas night I sent them
beyond the river Styx to pain forever
I wear a helm of darkness to hide the identity gem

they rape the weak to be the strong
I'll be the death they can count on
I smash their bones, silence their mouths
This is a place they'll never come out of

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, so die, bud

i realize it was wrong to do
being hateful and violent, too
they were putrid, out of their minds
they crossed the line, deserving to die
the world of liberalism and hate
didn't want them to go to waste
Bader-Ginsburg kept them alive
Why did only one of them die?

they rape the weak to be the strong
I'll be the death they can count on
I smash their bones, silence their mouths
This is a place where they'll ever go down

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, so die, bud

bridge
i impale the damned souls
on their own halberd poles
i show them life they could've had
if they'd seen they were doomed lads
They survived for fifteen years
after the crime in their teen fears
One injected to his doom
I'll be the one to destroy his tomb

(GUITAR SOLO)

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, you hit the ground with a thud
i shot and beat them all to death
They were high on mental meth
i taste revenge and it is sweet
the other brothers taste defeat

the girls thank me for my deeds
and ask why i have to leave
"to serve the weak," i reply,
"and watch these evil serpents cry"

only hatred fuels this song
sorry it took so long
fifteen years to be exact
everyone can say I've got their back

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, so die, bud
i never thought of it that way. I'm a Christian, so i thought putting God in there might generate some problems. But dangit, i guess i got some editing to do. so i'll do that
inspired by the two Texas girls and the animal who was executed 8/6/08
this is what i would've done had i been there


I see the future criminals before me
on that Texas night I sent them
beyond the river Styx to pain forever
I wear a helm of darkness to hide the identity gem

they rape the weak to be the strong
I'll be the death they can count on
I smash their bones, silence their mouths
This is a place they'll never come out of

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, so die, bud

evil trance I see in their eyes
as i beat them one last time
show their souls to God above
show him just what I have done
as the Guardian I put them through death
i smell the substance on their breath
I tell Him I finished the task
I hope I never have to go back

they rape the weak to be the strong
I'll be the death they can count on
I smash their bones, silence their mouths
This is a place they'll never come out of

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, so die, bud

bridge
i impale the damned souls
on their own halberd poles
i show them life they could've had
if they'd been good instead of bad
They survived for fifteen years
after the crime in their teen fears
One injected to his doom
I'll be the one to destroy his tomb

(GUITAR SOLO)

chorus
gang-banging sons whose evil I quell
As I crush them I show them hell
I prevent the shedding of innocent blood
I am the Guardian, you hit the ground with a thud
i shot and beat them all to death
They were high on mental meth
i taste revenge and it is sweet
the other brothers taste defeat

the girls thank me for my deeds
and ask why i have to leave
"to serve the Lord," i reply,
"and watch these evil serpents cry"
e| 9\6/9 9b--------- 12b
B| 9\6/9 9\7\6/7/9
G| 9\7/9

yea. that'd sound awesome.
hey, i thought up some chords i could put on here

an e variation


D| 14
A| 14
E| 0

and one that requires drop c on the d-string (there are a lot of these)

C| 4
A| 2
E| 0

try 'em if you like 'em, and i will submit more L8r
[QUOTE=player o slayer]your a fag

dude, that's so not cool. just be mellow, man.
and you can kiss it
does anybody have the tabs for "My spirit will go on" by dragonforce? if you do thx please post 'em, if you don't thats ok. we'll keep going.
dude, squiers are made cheap. Mexican-made guitars aren't as good as American guitars, but they're priced better, so it could go either way.
we ride forward
constantly taking ground
in our war wagons
we really get around

(chorus)
don't take us as weak
we're the ones who seek
a better tomorrow
there are sometimes
when you'll cry
and you'll feel sorrow
and that's our driving force

two hundred days on the road
when gas prices go too high
running on frying oil
we burn rubber through the night
and we'll fight all that is unjust
we say "eternity or bust"
(chorus)

destruction we left in our wake
get out of the way for your sake
a feeling's an escaping spirit
do you have time to hear it?
(chorus)
dude, these lyrics rock!!!!!!!!
cool dude. way to welcome a new person. *pat on the back*