# Leech. Part 2

Leech, Grubbs, and Jessica; could this be the formation of something sensational?

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me likey everybodys got a bit of carl in them, very good writing man
yo get your guitar in tune bro what the ****, i know you respect your instrument, it shows, but its gotta SHOW, know what i mean? otherwise, you have the dedication/passion that all great guys have. your storys developing great, its got me hooked =) love carl. btw when he gets an awesome guitar, whats it gonna be? and talk about effects too make it authentic love the story overall keep it up =)
While, everyone bashes everyone else, may i just say i like this story and i want to see where its gonna go!
007dude wrote: "Did you know that to find the length of a line segment, you would find the difference of the two x and y co-ordinates, square them, add them together, and then find the square root of that sum." ...Sorry but that's to find a gradient of a line, not the length. Pythagoras' theorem.
Ok ignore my post...just found out that gradient is dumbed down to line segment...what have I missed.
"Did you know that to find the length of a line segment, you would find the difference of the two x and y co-ordinates, square them, add them together, and then find the square root of that sum." ...Sorry but that's to find a gradient of a line, not the length. Pythagoras' theorem.
seemeel wrote: This kid should do his maths homework. Believe it or not, it IS useful if you want to get a decent job, and not be a bum. I also don't approve of the defacing of the Tele. This kid annoys me.
Oh, hello again. I remember you. You're unnecessary adjective guy. It's funny you stopped reading part one *quote* "after the first few paragraphs", yet you came back for part two. Funny, isn't it?
CPDmusic wrote: seemeel wrote: This kid should do his maths homework. Believe it or not, it IS useful if you want to get a decent job, and not be a bum. I also don't approve of the defacing of the Tele. This kid annoys me. Oh, hello again. I remember you. You're unnecessary adjective guy. It's funny you stopped reading part one *quote* "after the first few paragraphs", yet you came back for part two. Funny, isn't it?
I am totally with u, that guys a douschebag, btw, nice story
I hadnt even put two and two together to come up with the fact that I couldnt be at Grubbs house and my house with Jessica Stowe at the same time
Aaaand that's why you need maths. But yeah, the others are right. Get the guitar in tune. But it's cool with the "who cares?" over the Fender logo. So many people get a strat or w/e as a first guitar, my criteria when I got mine was "it mustn't be a strat".
The antagonist is dick dale the legendary surf guitar player lol
TheDanny385SG wrote: I am totally with u, that guys a douschebag, btw, nice story
Righto hero.
jm911 wrote: But then it hit me. How had I not put this together either? I had a sudden spur of creativity, I had a drummer and a singer who loved my music, and they both wanted to jam with me. I had always been meaning to start a band, but this time it was handed to me on a silver platter! well, duh. i'm really surprised that a musically-passionate guy like him didnt think of that the moment jessica invited him to jam. To the left of the couch and the guitar, somewhat off to the side, was an ancient drum kit. Much like my guitar, I had bought it used, and it was nothing fancy. A bass drum with a hole in the skin that was masked by duct-tape and spray painted black, a snare drum, a floor tom, a hi-hat, a crash, and two toms. I never actually played it; it was for whenever the jam time Grubbs and I had rolled around to my house. He didnt mind playing that old beat-up kit; he actually somewhat preferred it to his own. im not so sure about this, but i think this is a Deus ex Machina - something that just turns up in the story to make it progress, but it is not mentioned before.
It isn't a Deus ex Machina.
All in all, good chapter. A few errors I think, but still good.
sfedf1 wrote: huh? bass playeeeeer? good stuff but i don't see how smeone ca write songs without singing properly
I can't sing for shit, but I can write lyrics better than anyone i know. I'm sure there are loads of people who can write awesome songs without being a good singer.
OH and if you think math is useless, wait till chemistry.
co-ordinates
this definitely tells me he didn't listen in math class lol
seemeel : This kid should do his maths homework. Believe it or not, it IS useful if you want to get a decent job, and not be a bum. I also don't approve of the defacing of the Tele. This kid annoys me.
Fuck you.
But then it hit me. How had I not put this together either? I had a sudden spur of creativity, I had a drummer and a singer who loved my music, and they both wanted to jam with me. I had always been meaning to start a band, but this time it was handed to me on a silver platter!
well, duh. i'm really surprised that a musically-passionate guy like him didnt think of that the moment jessica invited him to jam.
To the left of the couch and the guitar, somewhat off to the side, was an ancient drum kit. Much like my guitar, I had bought it used, and it was nothing fancy. A bass drum with a hole in the skin that was masked by duct-tape and spray painted black, a snare drum, a floor tom, a hi-hat, a crash, and two toms. I never actually played it; it was for whenever the jam time Grubbs and I had rolled around to my house. He didnt mind playing that old beat-up kit; he actually somewhat preferred it to his own.
im not so sure about this, but i think this is a Deus ex Machina - something that just turns up in the story to make it progress, but it is not mentioned before.
This kid should do his maths homework. Believe it or not, it IS useful if you want to get a decent job, and not be a bum. I also don't approve of the defacing of the Tele. This kid annoys me.
I am enjoying this. especially that the standard bully in the story actually plays guitar. good job. though don't make it all too cheesy
A few illogical things (he bought a used drum kit, only for his friend to play it, but they rarely play at that house, and the friend prefers that kit? Whut?) and I already knew what was coming after the first three sentences, but I'm still curious what you'll come to eventually.
Pretty sweet man. I have faith that you wont go with the cliche "band" story. Underdogs make it big because they sent their crappy demo to the biggest A&R rep in the country haha. If I was writing the next chapter, I'd put a twist on it. I'd be like Victor Wooten is a new teacher at Carl's school and he was now looking for a new band for some reason and he plays bass for them. That's what I would do. M. Night Shamalan style haha
Try jamming without a bassist. Sounds like shit.
the_perdestrian wrote: i don't think the drum thing is that weird. i know a couple guys who have drum kits around just for the sake of it.
I'm one of them. I think I've played it twice.
i don't think the drum thing is that weird. i know a couple guys who have drum kits around just for the sake of it.
huh? bass playeeeeer? good stuff but i don't see how smeone ca write songs without singing properly
Good chapter mate, looking forward to the next one